"West of pain" is such a beautiful way of describing death. That's how I interpret it. If life is like the sun, it gets more painful and bloody the more west it goes until it finally disappears beneath the waves. Perhaps that's the reason behind the sea imagery at the end. This is the first poem I've read by you and I really enjoyed it.
I loved this one for its own merits, but it also made me jealous because it explores a lot of the emotion and conflict I tried to put in my invisible man piece in much more succinct way. You did more in this short piece than I did with almost 2000 words.
Oh this hit hard
Ohhh this is goood!🔥
powerful, rhythmic!
dragged in by your wave.
beached.
what shore do I taste the sand of?
"West of pain" is such a beautiful way of describing death. That's how I interpret it. If life is like the sun, it gets more painful and bloody the more west it goes until it finally disappears beneath the waves. Perhaps that's the reason behind the sea imagery at the end. This is the first poem I've read by you and I really enjoyed it.
excellent
I loved this one for its own merits, but it also made me jealous because it explores a lot of the emotion and conflict I tried to put in my invisible man piece in much more succinct way. You did more in this short piece than I did with almost 2000 words.